Difference between revisions of "Talk:World Media Association"
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The World Media Association (WMA)...-- | The World Media Association (WMA)...-- | ||
| − | replace "flunkies" with a more precise term. As a general observation, regardless of the (dis)respect in which we hold this org, we need as far as poss to make the facts speak for themselves. When we've shown the reader thru evidence what the org is like, and he is ready to make his judgment, then we can come in with one of our own. | + | replace "flunkies" with a more precise term. What is the precise role of each of these people in the organisation? As a general observation, regardless of the (dis)respect in which we hold this org, we need as far as poss to make the facts speak for themselves. When we've shown the reader thru evidence what the org is like, and he is ready to make his judgment, then we can come in with one of our own. |
Amb. Phillip Sanchez-- | Amb. Phillip Sanchez-- | ||
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That actually gets more crazier, because you see-- | That actually gets more crazier, because you see-- | ||
| − | omit--what follows is quite crazy enough for us to get the point. It's a matter of show, don't tell. | + | omit--what follows is quite crazy enough for us to get the point. It's a matter of show, don't tell. "Buddha's cousin": joke? it confuses. |
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| + | Like all the WMA functionaries -- | ||
| + | "fuctionaries" too vague. | ||
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| + | as the former publisher of the New York City Tribune -- | ||
| + | is this a WMA publication? if so, say so. similarly re Tiempos del Mundo. | ||
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| + | and spoke with O'Sullivan back in the WMA gig in Seoul 2002 -- | ||
| + | "spoke with": does this mean he was a featured speaker at a WMA conference? avoid "gig" as not precise. is it a conference? | ||
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| + | Johnn -- | ||
| + | surely John? | ||
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| + | in the capacity of Executive Editor, UPI - Moon has connections to Insight magazine -- | ||
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| + | again, see 1st para; you need to have shown us the precise relationship between UPI and WMA | ||
Revision as of 17:25, 28 September 2008
Para The World Media Association (WMA)...--
replace "flunkies" with a more precise term. What is the precise role of each of these people in the organisation? As a general observation, regardless of the (dis)respect in which we hold this org, we need as far as poss to make the facts speak for themselves. When we've shown the reader thru evidence what the org is like, and he is ready to make his judgment, then we can come in with one of our own.
Amb. Phillip Sanchez-- what is Amb.?
On the WMA website Phillip Sanchez, on the quotes from one of Moon's advertisements:--
confusing grammar; rewrite
That actually gets more crazier, because you see--
omit--what follows is quite crazy enough for us to get the point. It's a matter of show, don't tell. "Buddha's cousin": joke? it confuses.
Like all the WMA functionaries -- "fuctionaries" too vague.
as the former publisher of the New York City Tribune -- is this a WMA publication? if so, say so. similarly re Tiempos del Mundo.
and spoke with O'Sullivan back in the WMA gig in Seoul 2002 -- "spoke with": does this mean he was a featured speaker at a WMA conference? avoid "gig" as not precise. is it a conference?
Johnn -- surely John?
in the capacity of Executive Editor, UPI - Moon has connections to Insight magazine --
again, see 1st para; you need to have shown us the precise relationship between UPI and WMA
