Talk:Michael Shrimpton - Revision history

Claire Robinson at 16:57, 7 October 2008

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−	~~The main sponsors of these vigilantes were ...--~~

−	I have had to delete this whole para as there was no source given as to the sponsors of "these vigilantes", though it would be good info to have if supportable. Also, the last sentence of the para is too subjective.
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−	~~In general, it's really good.~~
−	~~[[User:Claire\|Claire]]~~
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−	I seen old Shrimpo on Sky news' round up of the press and thought I'd have a go — you'll prob. want to section off the summit stuff but i thought I'd keep going with it and bang down as much as poss while I'm in the mood: feel free to monkey around with it - its all a first draft as such
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−	~~useful ref http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Intelligence_Summit~~

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	I seen old Shrimpo on Sky news' round up of the press and thought I'd have a go — you'll prob. want to section off the summit stuff but i thought I'd keep going with it and bang down as much as poss while I'm in the mood: feel free to monkey around with it - its all a first draft as such		I seen old Shrimpo on Sky news' round up of the press and thought I'd have a go — you'll prob. want to section off the summit stuff but i thought I'd keep going with it and bang down as much as poss while I'm in the mood: feel free to monkey around with it - its all a first draft as such

−		+	useful ref http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Intelligence_Summit
−	~~Looks good~~. ~~REmember that links to new pages need [[link]] and not [link] which seems to affect thispage strangely?~~
−	~~--[[User:David\|David]] 14:04, 5 December 2007 (GMT)~~

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+The main sponsors of these vigilantes were ...--
-do you have a source for the fact that these orgs were sponsors? Pls include a ref to this source.
+I have had to delete this whole para as there was no source given as to the sponsors of "these vigilantes", though it would be good info to have if supportable. Also, the last sentence of the para is too subjective.
 In general, it's really good.

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 It would be interesting to compare his opinion of the guilt of Saddam Hussein (as head of state and thus guilty) to Pinochet (as head of state and thus not guilty). --
 I do not understand this so have deleted it, but if you want to clarify it, pls reinstate.
 [[User:Claire|Claire]]

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 Ilana Freedman is Managing Partner of GGI. Other partners include Lt. Colonel Gordon Cucullu, Intelligence Director with GGI (and Benador). --
 I've edited this sentences as a hanging "others" was unclear. Is it correct -- is the lt colonel a partner?
 [[User:Claire|Claire]]

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 competing conspiracy theories --
 can you be more accurate? do you need this phrase? I find it confusing as there is the question of which/whose conspiracy theories these are; "conspiracy theories" is one of those phrases like "terrorist" that needs to be understood in context.
 [[User:Claire|Claire]]

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	do you have a source for the fact that these orgs were sponsors? Pls include a ref to this source.		do you have a source for the fact that these orgs were sponsors? Pls include a ref to this source.
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		+	competing conspiracy theories --
		+	can you be more accurate? do you need this phrase? I find it confusing as there is the question of which/whose conspiracy theories these are; "conspiracy theories" is one of those phrases like "terrorist" that needs to be understood in context.
	[[Claire]]		[[Claire]]

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	+	do you have a source for the fact that these orgs were sponsors? Pls include a ref to this source.
	+	[[Claire]]

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−	~~David - you're conflicting again! i'll be going off to watch the football in a while - why not leave the massacre till then.~~	+

	I seen old Shrimpo on Sky news' round up of the press and thought I'd have a go — you'll prob. want to section off the summit stuff but i thought I'd keep going with it and bang down as much as poss while I'm in the mood: feel free to monkey around with it - its all a first draft as such		I seen old Shrimpo on Sky news' round up of the press and thought I'd have a go — you'll prob. want to section off the summit stuff but i thought I'd keep going with it and bang down as much as poss while I'm in the mood: feel free to monkey around with it - its all a first draft as such
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		+	Looks good. REmember that links to new pages need [[link]] and not [link] which seems to affect thispage strangely?
		+	--[[User:David\|David]] 14:04, 5 December 2007 (GMT)